Model essay 3 of 10: advantages and disadvantages

Model Essay 3: Working from Home

Question type: advantages and disadvantages. The wording asks whether the advantages outweigh - so a balanced list without a verdict cannot reach Band 7.

The question

An increasing number of people now work from home rather than travelling to an office.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Write at least 250 words.

Read the wording before you plan

Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? requires a verdict: you must say which is greater and why.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages requires only a balanced account, and adding a strong verdict is not penalised but is not required.

These two wordings look almost identical and are marked differently. Candidates lose a band by answering the wrong one.

The plan

ParagraphContent
IntroductionVerdict stated immediately: advantages outweigh, but only for certain kinds of work and certain stages of a career. A qualified verdict is still a verdict.
Body 1Advantages: time recovered from commuting, and control over when concentrated work happens.
Body 2Disadvantages: the loss of unplanned contact, which falls hardest on new and junior staff.
Body 3Why the balance still favours home working - and why the disadvantage is fixable while the commute is not.
ConclusionRestate the verdict with its condition attached.

The model essay

Original RCF model answer (283 words)

Question: An increasing number of people now work from home rather than travelling to an office. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Working from home has moved in a few years from an unusual arrangement to an ordinary one. On balance I think its advantages are the greater, although this depends heavily on the kind of work involved and on how experienced the worker is.

The clearest advantage is the recovery of time. A daily commute of an hour each way consumes roughly ten hours a week, and that time is not merely lost but actively unpleasant, which is why people who stop commuting report improvements in wellbeing out of proportion to the hours saved. The second advantage is control over when demanding work is done. Offices impose a common rhythm on everybody, and it suits some people badly; at home, a person who thinks clearly early in the morning can use that time instead of spending it on a train.

The main disadvantage is the loss of unplanned contact. A great deal of useful information moves through workplaces informally - an overheard remark, a question asked in passing, the correction of a small misunderstanding before it becomes a large one. None of this survives a calendar. The cost falls most heavily on people who are new to a job or early in a career, who learn largely by watching others and by asking questions too small to justify arranging a meeting.

That disadvantage is real, but it seems to me more tractable than the alternative. Organisations can bring people together deliberately - a fixed day each week, longer periods together for new staff - and recover much of what is lost. Nothing comparable can be done about a commute.

For most established workers in most office-based roles, therefore, the advantages clearly outweigh the disadvantages, provided that employers take the isolation of newer colleagues seriously.

Why this answer works

  • The verdict appears in the introduction and is repeated in the conclusion, with the same condition attached both times. The question asks do they outweigh? and the essay answers it twice.
  • A qualified verdict is still a verdict. On balance ... although this depends on the kind of work is a clear answer. What would fail is there are advantages and disadvantages on both sides.
  • The third body paragraph is the one that earns Band 8, because it does the actual weighing rather than leaving the reader to do it. Most candidates list advantages, list disadvantages, and then assert a conclusion that nothing in the essay supports.
  • The comparison is made on a stated criterion - which problem can be solved - rather than on volume of points. That is genuine analysis.
  • Concrete illustration without invented data: ten hours a week is arithmetic from the essay's own premise, not a statistic about the world.
  • Precise vocabulary used sparingly: tractable, out of proportion to, impose a common rhythm. One well-chosen word per paragraph beats a decorated sentence.
  • 283 words, three body paragraphs, and the shortest is the decisive one.

Language worth borrowing

On balance I think its advantages are the greater, although
out of proportion to the hours saved
None of this survives a calendar.
more tractable than the alternative
provided that

Check your own attempt

  • Did you give a verdict, or only a balanced list?
  • Does your essay contain a paragraph that actually weighs the two sides against each other?
  • Did you name the criterion on which you weighed them?
  • Is your conclusion's verdict the same as your introduction's?
  • Are you between 260 and 300 words?

Now try this variation

Many companies now recruit staff from anywhere in the world rather than from the local area. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

Note the different instruction: this one asks you to discuss, not to decide. A balanced account is sufficient, and forcing a verdict is not what is being tested. Practise noticing the difference.

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