Model essay 18 of 20: discussion

Model Essay 18: Science Subjects or the Arts

Discussion: discuss both views. The question, a plan, the essay itself, and why it would score well.

  • IELTS Writing Task 2
  • Discussion essay
  • Education
  • Academic and General Training
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The question

Some people believe schools should concentrate on science and technology, because these subjects are most useful to a country's economy. Others believe the arts are equally important.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

The plan

ParagraphContent
IntroductionRephrase both views. Position: a false choice; the school years are for breadth.
Body 1The case for science: jobs, national development, and where the shortages are.
Body 2The case for the arts: judgement, expression, and the industries the arts support.
Body 3 (short)Why a school is the wrong place to specialise: children choose at fifteen with poor information.
ConclusionBreadth at school, specialisation later.

The model essay

Original RCF model answer (257 words)

Question: Some people believe schools should concentrate on science and technology, because these subjects are most useful to a country's economy. Others believe the arts are equally important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is a long-running argument about whether schools should prioritise science and technology or give the arts equal weight. In my view the choice is a false one, at least while pupils are still at school.

The case for science is practical. Countries need engineers, doctors and technicians, shortages in these fields are real, and the qualifications lead reliably to employment. A government paying for education can reasonably ask what the country gets in return, and scientific training produces an answer that is easy to see.

The case for the arts is easy to state badly, so it is worth stating properly. Studying literature, history or music teaches a pupil to interpret, to judge evidence and to express an idea so that another person understands it, and those abilities are needed in any career, including scientific ones. The arts also underpin industries that employ large numbers of people, from design and publishing to film, which are rarely counted when the economic argument is made.

My own view rests on the age of the pupils. A child of fifteen choosing between these paths knows very little about either, and a school system that forces the choice early will lose good scientists who were never taught properly and good writers who were told the subject was worthless. Specialisation belongs at university, when the student knows more.

In conclusion, science and the arts are both necessary, and the sensible arrangement is breadth at school followed by depth afterwards. A country that neglects either ends up short of something it needs.

Language worth borrowing

In my view the choice is a false one, at least while ...
Rejects the premise, which is a legitimate and strong position if you justify it.
The case for X is easy to state badly, so it is worth stating properly.
Signals that you know the weak version of the argument and will not use it.
...which are rarely counted when the economic argument is made.
Answers the other side's strongest point on its own terms.
My own view rests on the age of the pupils.
Tells the reader exactly what your opinion depends on.
A country that neglects either ends up short of something it needs.
A final sentence that is general without being empty.

Why this would score well

The four things an examiner marks, and what this essay does about each. The wording of the criteria is IELTS's own and is published for candidates; the comments are ours.

CriterionWhat this essay does
Task ResponseBoth views are argued, and the opinion is a genuine third position with a stated basis.
Coherence and CohesionEach paragraph announces its job in its first sentence, so the essay can be followed at speed.
Lexical ResourceEducation vocabulary used precisely: specialisation, breadth, interpret, underpin.
Grammatical Range and AccuracyRelative clauses carry the extra information, and the long sentences stay grammatical.

Check your own attempt

  • Did you argue both sides before giving your opinion?
  • If you rejected the premise, did you justify why?
  • Did you answer the other side's strongest point, not its weakest?
  • Did you avoid inventing employment figures?
  • Is the conclusion a judgement rather than a summary?
  • Are you between 250 and 300 words?

Use it, do not memorise it

An essay learnt by heart is easy to spot and cannot fit the question you are actually given. Take the shapes from Language worth borrowing, write your own answer to this question in forty minutes, then compare.

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