Model essay 15 of 20: discussion

Model Essay 15: Global Brands and Local Culture

Discussion: discuss both views. The question, a plan, the essay itself, and why it would score well.

  • IELTS Writing Task 2
  • Discussion essay
  • Globalisation
  • Academic and General Training
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The question

Some people believe that the spread of global brands and media is destroying local cultures. Others think it increases choice and understanding between countries.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

The plan

ParagraphContent
IntroductionRephrase both views. Position: the loss is real but uneven; the gain is real too.
Body 1The case for harm: shops, films and food that look the same everywhere; languages and crafts under pressure.
Body 2The case for benefit: access to other cultures, and young people choosing rather than being forced.
Body 3 (short)What decides which happens: whether local culture is supported, taught and profitable.
ConclusionPosition restated: the outcome is a choice, not a fate.

The model essay

Original RCF model answer (285 words)

Question: Some people believe that the spread of global brands and media is destroying local cultures. Others think it increases choice and understanding between countries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

As global companies and media reach further, some argue that local cultures are being erased, while others believe the exchange brings choice and understanding. In my view both effects are genuine, and which one dominates depends on what a country does about it.

The concern about loss is not imagined. Shopping streets in distant cities now hold the same shops, cinemas show the same few films, and children in many places know foreign characters better than the stories of their own region. Languages with small numbers of speakers lose young speakers first, and crafts stop being practised once the people who buy them prefer imported goods. Once these things go, they rarely come back.

The other side, however, is equally true. A person today can read the literature, hear the music and follow the news of countries they will never visit, and that access was impossible for their grandparents. Contact of this kind makes other people harder to caricature. It is also worth remembering that young people are not passive: when they choose foreign music, they are choosing, and calling that destruction is a little insulting to them.

What seems to decide the outcome is whether local culture is actively supported. Where a language is taught in schools, where local films and music are funded, and where traditional work earns a living, both can exist together; the same young person listens to international music and speaks their own language at home. Where nothing is done, the imported version simply fills the space.

In conclusion, global media brings genuine benefits, but a culture survives only if it is taught, funded and used. The loss people fear is a result of neglect rather than an unavoidable consequence.

Language worth borrowing

...and which one dominates depends on what a country does about it.
A position that explains itself. It also sets up the third body paragraph.
The concern about loss is not imagined.
Grants the other side seriously in four words.
Once these things go, they rarely come back.
A short sentence after long ones. It lands.
It is also worth remembering that young people are not passive.
Introduces a point the reader may not have considered.
The loss people fear is a result of neglect rather than an unavoidable consequence.
Ends on a distinction, which is a strong way to finish a discussion essay.

Why this would score well

The four things an examiner marks, and what this essay does about each. The wording of the criteria is IELTS's own and is published for candidates; the comments are ours.

CriterionWhat this essay does
Task ResponseBoth views are argued properly, and the opinion is a real third position rather than a repeat of one side.
Coherence and CohesionView, counter-view, then the condition that decides between them. Each paragraph has one job.
Lexical ResourceCareful, plain choices: erased, caricature, neglect, passive. No thesaurus words.
Grammatical Range and AccuracySentence length varies deliberately, with where ... clauses used to set conditions.

Check your own attempt

  • Did you argue both views before giving your own?
  • Is your opinion more than agreeing with one side?
  • Did you avoid naming real companies unnecessarily?
  • Does every paragraph have one clear job?
  • Did you vary sentence length on purpose?
  • Are you between 250 and 300 words?

Use it, do not memorise it

An essay learnt by heart is easy to spot and cannot fit the question you are actually given. Take the shapes from Language worth borrowing, write your own answer to this question in forty minutes, then compare.

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